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($) Taking credit

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Like our recent posts on tone in essays, today’s may be another one of those you want to mark with that little Favorites button at the bottom, so you can find it again in a week or so, when you’re panicking and beating your head against the desk and trying to figure out how to…

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($) essay critique! Tuck short and long-term goals / why MBA / why Tuck

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About a month ago, this essay was submitted for consideration for a freebie blahg review by an Indian BSer who’s applying to Tuck (or possibly he already submitted in their November round? Not sure; if so, we got it much too late to turn it around that quickly 🙁 ). This BSer is in investment…

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($) The need for specifics

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As you can see from some of the posts this week, we’re moving into Round 2 mode! We’ll be talking more and more about essay execution in the coming days — and pricing is going up soon! We’re starting to get busy, which means that if you want to use us to the greatest advantage,…

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($) Here is a great example of “showing”

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Show, don’t tell. Show, don’t tell. If you’ve gotten your essays decimated, you’ve likely heard that by now. Here is literally what we mean: From article Lessons Learned Scaling Airbnb 100X by former Airbnb product manager Jonathan Golden. His advice statement: When competition appears, move faster than you think you possibly can. That’s pretty descriptive…

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($) An example of TELLING – when he should’ve been SHOWING

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This seems unfair but we’re going to use a post from the Michigan Ross Dean to illustrate how NOT to write your essays. This came out on the Friday after the events in Charlottesville. The title is: Michigan Ross Makes a Positive Difference and Stands United Against Hate We clicked on the title. We were…

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($) essay critique! Kellogg “How have you grown?”

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Another Brave Supplicant ponyed up the big bucks threw a draft over the transom and asked for some freebie help, this time for Kellogg Essay 2. As a reminder, here’s the question: Pursuing an MBA is a catalyst for personal and professional growth. How have you grown in the past? How do you intend to…

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($) Word choice matters.

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We had a BSer send in an essay last season where they were trying to convey how they’re ready to pursue their stated future career goals based on current work experience. They had a statement that said: “My participation nearly from the start of the deployment was very helpful to become acquainted with the business…”…

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($) essay critique! LBS goals – and more “show, don’t tell”

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Back in February we posted a sad post about an essay for LBS that we had little hope for. 🙁 Today we’re circling back to that same essay in an interest of helping all of you to better understand this crucial essay-writing advice that we’ve been discussing. You can go back to that original post…

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($) Inside out, vs outside in stories for your MBA essays (Berkeley, Kellogg, Stanford)

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Kellogg has an essay question this year asking you to discuss “growth”. They’re not alone. Berkeley has three such questions asking for personal experiences: The instructions for Haas Essay 2 offer separate choices for you to hang yourself by select from. The specific keywords to note in those Haas questions that tip you off that…

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($) All those “humble” BSers.

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There seemed to be a trend hitting Snarkville last season, particularly in Round 2, where we had all these BSers writing in their essays to the top business schools about how “humble” they are. While we certainly appreciate that quality in a person – no really, despite the snark often coming from our direction, we…

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