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($) Being a “thought leader” is not a career goal.

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https://twitter.com/adweak/status/1039759735879290885     Sometimes people tell us that their long-term post-MBA career goal is to be a “thought leader.” (Apparently in Washington, DC, people say this on first dates , too.) This is not a career goal for so many reasons – and even worse, it just sounds, ohidunno, maybe the word is cocky?? We…

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($) Compare and Contrast (Part 2)

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Recently we laid out two techniques that applicants often use in essays: 1) Talks about how the school they’re applying to is “the best at blah blah” or is “world renowned” or something about how it’s so set apart from its peers 2) Talks about THEMSELVES in similar language, saying that they were the only…

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($) Do not overpromote!

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Given our fraught public dialogue these days, the adcoms are becoming ever more sensitive to hype and propaganda in MBA apps. You don’t want to risk your candidacy by taking liberties with language! We don’t mean our standard exhortation about lying. Instead, we’re talking about hype. We have seen BSers inadvertently step in it when…

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($) Taking credit

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Like our recent posts on tone in essays, today’s may be another one of those you want to mark with that little Favorites button at the bottom, so you can find it again in a week or so, when you’re panicking and beating your head against the desk and trying to figure out how to…

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($) essay critique! Tuck short and long-term goals / why MBA / why Tuck

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About a month ago, this essay was submitted for consideration for a freebie blahg review by an Indian BSer who’s applying to Tuck (or possibly he already submitted in their November round? Not sure; if so, we got it much too late to turn it around that quickly 🙁 ). This BSer is in investment…

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($) The need for specifics

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As you can see from some of the posts this week, we’re moving into Round 2 mode! We’ll be talking more and more about essay execution in the coming days — and pricing is going up soon! We’re starting to get busy, which means that if you want to use us to the greatest advantage,…

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($) Here is a great example of “showing”

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Show, don’t tell. Show, don’t tell. If you’ve gotten your essays decimated, you’ve likely heard that by now. Here is literally what we mean: From article Lessons Learned Scaling Airbnb 100X by former Airbnb product manager Jonathan Golden. His advice statement: When competition appears, move faster than you think you possibly can. That’s pretty descriptive…

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($) An example of TELLING – when he should’ve been SHOWING

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This seems unfair but we’re going to use a post from the Michigan Ross Dean to illustrate how NOT to write your essays. This came out on the Friday after the events in Charlottesville. The title is: Michigan Ross Makes a Positive Difference and Stands United Against Hate We clicked on the title. We were…

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($) essay critique! Kellogg “How have you grown?”

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Another Brave Supplicant ponyed up the big bucks threw a draft over the transom and asked for some freebie help, this time for Kellogg Essay 2. As a reminder, here’s the question: Pursuing an MBA is a catalyst for personal and professional growth. How have you grown in the past? How do you intend to…

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($) Word choice matters.

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We had a BSer send in an essay last season where they were trying to convey how they’re ready to pursue their stated future career goals based on current work experience. They had a statement that said: “My participation nearly from the start of the deployment was very helpful to become acquainted with the business…”…

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