($) essay critique: Schulich career goals (or any school’s career goals): entrepreneurship

September 7, 2013 by EssaySnark - Discusses Schulich

Whoa, another Saturday post? Yeah, well… we’re feeling guilty. There’s a bunch of essays submitted for a free review that have languished in the inbox awaiting some response or another. The oldest one came in way back in July and we haven’t managed to do anything with it. Apologies to everyone we’ve kept waiting, and…

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Here's what others have said about this:

Kaiser says

September 8, 2013 at 7:43 am

Great article as always. One question that I do have is regarding ambitious long term goals. Shouldn’t a top business school *want* that? After all, they’d all rather produce the next Warren Buffet than Joe Schmo, Assistant VP of regional sales at Munder Difflin, and it’d be nice to see a candidate who has the desire to get there, IMO.
Especially for career enhancers, I wonder if moderation is a good idea – Eg: a guy has been working 4 years at Blackrock, and post MBA wants to join Apollo. Long term (say 15 years), he would want to hit partner at Apollo or set up his own shop, as opposed to just bumbling along for the balance of his career, right?

I respect your opinion – I’m just trying to see what I’m missing here, and whether I have it all wrong.
- essaysnark says
  
  September 8, 2013 at 2:21 pm
  
  We just wrote about this on GMAT Club.
Nomiracle says

September 9, 2013 at 8:52 am

Can you give some examples based on your experience where these goals have worked out well? For those who seriously plan to start a business in the long term, saying anything else may well end up sounding artificial, or may actually harm them in the interviews. Isn’t it true that the best route for them would be to just connect-the-dots and show their commitment to the plan they have set out for themselves?
- essaysnark says
  
  September 9, 2013 at 3:58 pm
  
  @Nomiracle, this is such a good question and we’ve been getting so much ~~flak~~ ~~pushback~~ attentive curiosity about it that we are dedicating tomorrow’s blahg post to this entire topic. Thank you and stay tuned!
  EssaySnark