essay critique: HBS essay 2 “done better”

July 6, 2012 by EssaySnark - Discusses Harvard

You know the question: “Tell us about something you wish you had done better.” You get 400 words to lay it down. This is what one Brave Supplicant offered up: September 15th, 2009 was the worst day of my life. Two months after his pancreatic cancer diagnosis, my father was back in the hospital to…

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NJP (Brave Supplicant) says

July 10, 2012 at 6:57 pm

Thank you very much for the feedback, EssaySnark.

While we (the Brave Supplicants) sometimes have a difficult time digesting your snarky comments (ps-they’re not really that snarky), they’re always extremely helpful, so I’m extremely appreciative that you chose to review my work. As you mentioned in a previous post, there is plenty of time for me to craft the perfect set of essays, so I am going to continue brainstorming/writing and will keep you posted on my progress. Maybe, one day, I’ll even become a… *gasp* …paying customer!

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Thanks again,
NJP (Brave Supplicant)