Describe a life experience that has shaped you. At a young age my father established a manufacturing unit that was growing successfully when a few family members deceived him and swindled his plant, leaving him with financial burdens and health challenges. Affected by the setback, he suffered his first heart attack two-months before my birth….
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Cassiopeia says
That essay was beautifully written!
Anonymous says
" . . .(S)windled his plant . . . ?" Really?
This was perhaps the most egregious of the more than several clumsily written (if not "heavy footed") constructions that mark the essay.
Not only was I surprised to see that they were not caught (and corrected) by the writer of the essay before it was actually submitted, I was even more surprised to see that your review failed to pick up on them.
essaysnark says
Sorry, what, exactly, is Sir Royal Highness (aka "Anonymous") b!tching about? There are no typos here. We already noted that there were a few minor issues but none that interfere with comprehension. Nothing in this essay is inexcusable for a writer for whom English is not the first language.
Dan V says
Anonymous snarking of an applicants essay is not nice, especially over a questionable verb choice. At least add something rather than insulting two people's work.
Maybe, Rough day. Instead, talk it out with us. We are all running through a gambit of emotions during the application season.
essaysnark says
Wow, thanks Dan V!! Now THAT'S the kinda guy I hope gets into bschool!!!
Samudra says
Only one question: you ask the BSer to reference the sentence "I gained a maturity to address issues beyond my age.", but then ask him to leave out the para about him having to make the potentially life-or-death decision about his father's 2nd bypass? Isnt that para about the 2nd bypass doing exactly that?