essay critique: Kellogg career goals

August 23, 2011 by EssaySnark - Discusses Kellogg

This post was written in 2011. Kellogg hasn't had a formal career goals essay structured exactly this way for awhile, however goals are still very important for this school.

EssaySnark says, “Hmmm.” This is a new one. We got submitted a stack of essays from a BraveSupplicant to review and… They’re really effing good. This doesn’t happen that often. And we’re conflicted about it. This here Brave Supplicant sent them in looking for feedback. And the way we typically do that (when it’s offered…

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Here's what others have said about this:

Elastigirl says

August 23, 2011 at 2:21 pm

@ES: Kudos to you for NOT posting the essay. No really, I mean it!
Cassiopeia says

August 23, 2011 at 5:14 pm

Good for her! She's got submittable essays in mid August.
Anonymous says

August 24, 2011 at 5:22 pm

Great Analysis–this will definitely help
essaysnark says

August 24, 2011 at 5:31 pm

Glad to hear it, whoever-you-are!
ccatcher says

September 1, 2011 at 11:56 am

@ES: The first essay question says "Briefly assess your career progress to date". Does that mean that I should wrap up my career story as quick as possible and then talk about the future goals and why MBA.

My essay sounds more balanced if I talk about my career progress in a little details (around 400 words….I can trim that down to 50% of the essay length)
essaysnark says

September 1, 2011 at 5:02 pm

@ccatcher, you got it. Try to summarize the career history through a brief example or two of your key achievements, or a recap of the major highlights, and give some indication about how that's set you up for the next step. The career history part should be more than the reader could get from skimming the resume. But it needs to be brief. You probably should be spending more of the essay real estate on the career goals (40% history, 60% goals at a minimum – more goals may even be preferred).

Remember you need to fit in at least a little "why Kellogg" content here too. You can cover that in other essays as well but you should definitely have some of it here.

And yes, it's tricky to fit it all in!
ccatcher says

September 1, 2011 at 7:08 pm

Thanks a lot for the timely reply.